The goal is to learn how to write better.

分析的目的是为了提高科技英语写作水平，不是针对作者。

The Role of Aerosol in Climate Change, the Environment, and Human Health

https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/16742834.2012.11446983

Abstract

Green highlight is used to show good writing

好好学习：用绿色标出。

Yellow means "questionable."

黄色=“？”

Aerosol is an important component of the atmosphere, and its source, composition, distribution, and effects are highly complicated. 

Comment: Could be split into two sentences, especially when the subjects are not the same.

评论：应该用两句话来表述，因为他们的主语不同。

Governments and scientists have given much attention to aerosol problems, and it  has become a hot topic due to the important role it plays in climate change and the Earth's environment. 

Comment: Could be split into two sentences, especially when the subjects are not the same.

评论：应该用两句话来表述，因为他们的主语不同。

In this paper, 1) the importance of aerosol in climate change, the atmospheric environment, and human health is summarized; 

2) the recent serious problems of aerosol pollution and the shortage of current aerosol research in China are pointed out; and 

3) the necessity to enhance aerosol research in China is emphasized.

Comment: Definitely could be written in three sentences.

评论：可以用三句话来表述。

Note: Overall speaking, the abstract is easy to understand. However, the writing could be improved.

最后，弱弱地感叹：唉，有点像我的一个会议摘要，笼笼统统的，没有“肉”。因为我当时还没有好的结果。

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