The goal is to learn how to write better.

分析的目的是为了提高科技英语写作水平(不是针对作者)。

Green highlight is used to show good writing.

绿色: 好好学习。

Yellow means "questionable."

黄色：有问题。

Blue is for discussion.

蓝色: 值得讨论。

Slower decay of landfalling hurricanes in a warming world

https://www.nature.com/articles/s41586-020-2867-7

Abstract

When a hurricane strikes land, the destruction of property and the environment and the loss of life are largely confined to a narrow coastal area. 

评论：超过两个and，容易引起“歧义”。

This is because hurricanes are fuelled by moisture from the ocean^1,2,3, and so hurricane intensity decays rapidly after striking land^4,5. 

In contrast to the effect of a warming climate on hurricane intensification, many aspects of which are fairly well understood^6,7,8,9,10, little is known of its effect on hurricane decay. 

Here we analyse intensity data for North Atlantic landfalling hurricanes¹¹ over the past 50 years and show that hurricane decay has slowed, and that the slowdown in the decay over time is in direct proportion to a contemporaneous rise in the sea surface temperature¹². 

评论：第三行的逗号，位置不对。应该移到第二行。

Thus, whereas in the late 1960s a typical hurricane lost about 75 per cent of its intensity in the first day past landfall, now the corresponding decay is only about 50 per cent. 

We also show, using computational simulations, that warmer sea surface temperatures induce a slower decay by increasing the stock of moisture that a hurricane carries as it hits land. 

This stored moisture constitutes a source of heat that is not considered in theoretical models of decay^13,14,15. 

评论：用“，which”更加合适。

Additionally, we show that climate-modulated changes in hurricane tracks^16,17 contribute to the increasingly slow decay.

Our findings suggest that as the world continues to warm, the destructive power of hurricanes will extend progressively farther inland.

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